Review my paragraph please$@%#$#?

JayJ1

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PLEASE REVIEW MY PARAGRAPH AS IT SONDS HORRIBLE FOR A JUNIOR>>>

As a freshman, I participated in the All-State 9/10 Orchestra. It was such a phenomenal experience, that I still remember every moment of it. I am planning on doing All-State throughout my High school years. It was an honor to play with high level payers from all over the state. I have also attended GCYS (Gwinnett Country Youth Symphony) as a freshman, and I am planning on continuing to participate through all my high school years.
 
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