This is my first time writing a novel, and my first time actually letting someone other that myself read my work, so I am a little self concious 
Please just give me some constructive feedback on what I can improve on, and any tips would be great. I know I am not that good, and it has some editing to do, so bear with me
Thank you soo much!
http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2822007/1/Undead_and_immortal
Please just give me some constructive feedback on what I can improve on, and any tips would be great. I know I am not that good, and it has some editing to do, so bear with me Thank you soo much!
http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2822007/1/Undead_and_immortal