What do you think of my Poem!?

Cass4ever

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I have never been much good at writing poetry I am a novelist aspiring anyway. Give me your honest opinion without being too brutal. Thanks. - Cass

ENDLESS LOVE
ENDLESS LOVE
Hands clasped together for the very last time
Sitting there by the hospital bed
Our roles are switched something I just can’t bare
His wrinkled aged face changing in front of me
To the man I wed all those many years ago
The howl of the bitter winter wind whips about outside promising to take his last breath
ENDLESS LOVE

ENDLESS LOVE
Rocking chairs sway in the cool autumn breeze
Children and grandchildren gone for the day
Just the two us quietly sitting staring out at the golden sunset
Not a word we need to say to each other
Together we sit seeing the beauty of our lives in the last rays of that day
Knowing it is just another autumn day we have gotten to be together for
ENDLESS LOVE

ENDLESS LOVE
Empty nesters something that snuck up on us both
Our house has never seemed so quite
No more yelling where is this and where is that mommy and daddy
Just the two of us staring at each other wondering where we go from here
How do we fill the silence how do we bare the quite
Staring at me and I staring at him we take to the garden to breath in the wondrous spring day
ENDLESS LOVE

ENLESS LOVE
Yelling and laughing pots clank as the spoon makes contact once more by the tiny hand
There seems little time to spend together these days
The seasons blur together as our time becomes mundane
We hardly look upon each other as we did those years ago
Will we get it back will we get that spark those goose bumps when we see each other
Time shall tell what will become of us but for now we steal little looks across the table as we used to
ENDLESS LOVE

ENDLESS LOVE
The broil of summer is not distraction enough from the cobalt blue eyes
They stare at me nervous yet happy as he braves the courage and takes my free hand
Sitting hand in hand is quit enough for now this small gesture gives me hope of its owns
I wish the night would go on the stars would continue to sparkle and this man would stay by my side
Will it last I wonder will I see him after tonight I feel the excitement as we sit hand in hand
The soft golden rays of dawn rises up before us as he braves one more and leans in for a kiss
ENDLESS LOVE

- Cass C.
 
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