What do you think of my story so far?

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http://www.wattpad.com/story/2117246-dear-diary

I've asked the same question before, but have now changed the story and want to know if people like it? And if people would continue reading it.
It is only 2 pages, so I would really appreciate it if people took time to read it. It's a story for teenagers, particularly girls. Yes, it's a cliche topic, but I have added a big twist.it is no where near finished, but I would like to know If people would keep reading it.
I would love honest opinions, so let me know what you think!
Thanks in advance(:
 
It's ok, it's interesting and I want to hear more, however, there are a couple of things I would brush up on,

1. the diary entries don't really sound like diary entries. Just a tip, I found that putting myself in my characters shoes then actually writing the diary entry, pretending I was that character really helpful.
2. Need more about the character in general before discovering she can read minds, i.e., age, race, appearance etc.
 
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