Would It Be Too 'Raw' If Vampires Could...?

[nicole'sgotspirit]

I've been writing something about Vampires for a while (just for fun) on Worthy of Publishing. Please, don't mention Twilight. I've decided that they're too soppy and my Vampires have too many human emotions, so I'm re-writing it in a way that is a lot more intense.

So, would it be to 'raw' if Vampires could basically seduce people into letting them drink their blood, and when they are drinking, the human's think that they're having sex?

I'd give it the correct rating and all, but do you think it's too much? I want there to be something about my Vampires that's different. Also, has this been done before? And, would you read something like this (if you weren't too young)? ;\ I'm a little wary about whether or not I should use this, so I'd appreciate some opinions and thoughts. Thanks in advance.

~Nicole.xx
Also, it's told from a Vampire's POV, so you won't get the graphic details of the actual sex, you'll just get about the blood, etc.

 

[amym]

Yes I've actually read a vampire novel before about a vampire named Vincent seducing his victims into letting him drink their blood. I don't know about the sex thing though, I don't think it's been done before. And yes I think it's a little extreme hahah. I guess you could pull it off if you explain it really well, address all of the readers' questions, and leave NO loop holes that make people stop and think "what the hell?!"

 

[POWWOW]

I think Ive read some things like that in Thirst by christoper Pike and maybe the Ann Rice novels <--- Awesome by the way.

 

[chris]

Not too sure if the victims would actually think they are having sex, but I could totally buy the vampire seducing their victims. I never saw or read Twilight, heard it was just too much of a Chick Flick. Maybe have the victims have some sort of experience, but I couldn't see sex as being a reasonable experience. For example, on one Supernatural episode, one of the guys gets entranced by a jenji (essentially a genie, but it was like a vampire in that in drank blood from its victims). The guy was then put into an alternate reality, where all the bad stuff in his life didn't happen and he was living in his own little paradise, all the while the jenji was drinking his blood little by little. Don't know how far plagiarism goes, but that is an idea.