Im a 14 year old, english isn't my first language, and i LOVE fantasy-fiction genres. XD
so i decided to make on of my own
please tell me what did you think of it and thanks in advance!
Chapter 1 : A New Beginning
Pain. Heat. Confusion. Suddenly, it’s all gone.
I got blurry visions. A girl appeared out of nowhere, crying and crying for help, until suddenly she stopped, and smiled. The image then shifted to a boy lying on a hill, dead, perhaps? Beside him stood a pot, with a queer looking green plant growing out of it. I moved closer to examine the plant, and all of a sudden the boy, who appeared so dead, stood up and said: Thank you, Dante. Thank you. Everything then disappeared after that.
I woke up. I was asleep on a hill, a lonely dark hill that had a fantastic view of the stars above. I instantly recognized the Orion constellation above me. I remember gazing at the stars lining the constellation whenever I felt hopeless. What else did I remember? Well, nothing. I decided that my name had to be Dante, because that’s what that creepy kid called me. The dark afternoon sky was gray and overcast. I felt a drop of cold rain drop on my forehead. Another on my cheek. As if things weren’t gloomy enough, drops of rain soon started pattering the blanket of dead leaves beneath my feet. I shivered and wrapped the scarf around my face as a gust of cold breeze rushed by me. Ignoring the rain, I began walking down the hill with hopes of finding a village at the bottom. Indeed, I was right. An old village filled with autumn trees came into my sight as I marched forward. It wasn’t a short walk, and before I reached the village, the rain started coming down a lot harder. Tired and soaked, I found a shelter beneath some branches and decided to wait there till the rain stopped. I dozed off unintentionally, and again I saw the same little kid wandering aimlessly around the hill. Somehow, I had managed to catch something. The hill where he was standing? It was where I woke up. Yes, there was no mistaking it.
so i decided to make on of my own
please tell me what did you think of it and thanks in advance!
Chapter 1 : A New Beginning
Pain. Heat. Confusion. Suddenly, it’s all gone.
I got blurry visions. A girl appeared out of nowhere, crying and crying for help, until suddenly she stopped, and smiled. The image then shifted to a boy lying on a hill, dead, perhaps? Beside him stood a pot, with a queer looking green plant growing out of it. I moved closer to examine the plant, and all of a sudden the boy, who appeared so dead, stood up and said: Thank you, Dante. Thank you. Everything then disappeared after that.
I woke up. I was asleep on a hill, a lonely dark hill that had a fantastic view of the stars above. I instantly recognized the Orion constellation above me. I remember gazing at the stars lining the constellation whenever I felt hopeless. What else did I remember? Well, nothing. I decided that my name had to be Dante, because that’s what that creepy kid called me. The dark afternoon sky was gray and overcast. I felt a drop of cold rain drop on my forehead. Another on my cheek. As if things weren’t gloomy enough, drops of rain soon started pattering the blanket of dead leaves beneath my feet. I shivered and wrapped the scarf around my face as a gust of cold breeze rushed by me. Ignoring the rain, I began walking down the hill with hopes of finding a village at the bottom. Indeed, I was right. An old village filled with autumn trees came into my sight as I marched forward. It wasn’t a short walk, and before I reached the village, the rain started coming down a lot harder. Tired and soaked, I found a shelter beneath some branches and decided to wait there till the rain stopped. I dozed off unintentionally, and again I saw the same little kid wandering aimlessly around the hill. Somehow, I had managed to catch something. The hill where he was standing? It was where I woke up. Yes, there was no mistaking it.