anyBody wanna read my excerpt? lol, anybody,it'll take, like a sec:)?

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“Settle down, next person to talk will get detention for a week,”
I couldn’t help but notice how Ms. Lyon became more aggressive every day. It was like something was invading her personal life and she had nothing better to do than take it out on us. Usually, art teachers were the peaceful ones and that’s who Ms. Lyon was at the beginning of the year but not long ago, she started to change, and it wasn’t just her usual fun personality, it was also her looks and outfits. What used to be long luscious blonde hair was now cropped short and dyed black. Her typical crystal blue that seemed like two cool pools now just seemed like frozen lakes ready to drown you as soon as you take a step. She seemed stressed as she passed out papers on every table. She was moving swiftly as if she didn’t have enough time to get all the papers out even though we had over fifty minutes left. As she got to my table, she tripped over her own red high heeled cover feet and hit the floor flat on her face.
 
I'm hooked :) Keep it up, I'd love to read more of it.
Oh and something else- you missed the word 'eyes' in the sentence that is describing them :)
Good luck~
 
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