Can you rate my poem and give me some advice thanks in advance?

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Unheard tears

As they fall from my face these reminders of my deepest despairs disappear in thin air never to be seen or heard from again. Why can’t they take my pain for the ride? Though silent they hold the unspoken candor. They don’t lie they keep secrets like a locked diary. Come and leave, exiled from the after birth of the emotions from wish they were conceived. See they provoke all my past and present fears producing this hybrid-anxiety that’s causing me to want to shut down from society, but my temperament won’t concede. How I envy their power to instigate then dissipate.
 
O.O that is some good stuff there. that's really really good. so good that i'm left speechless. bravo~ bravo! can u message me on how u write such a good poem? i really reallly enjoy this. its down to earth and somehow has a such a good rhyming pattern. please tell me how u did it! here's my email address: [email protected]
 
wow nice hey you should try to wright a love poem i have wroten 2 that are a page long and that one you read is also a page long
also visit my poem please http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=AuLU0eLcBahjNJbYpUNVSwPsy6IX;_ylv=3?qid=20090320182509AAI5uf6
 
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