JordanTurner
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i had an idea for a science fiction plot that is quite interesting-
in the present day a large government/military funded company has been working for our US/UK military and army for research, development and help. they design, manufacture and test new gadgets, vehicles, weapons and most military meetings and plans are held here in a tall city skyscraper.
the company has just asked to be funded for a project they know will let the army be more advanced and at a bigger advantage than any other force in the world - fit to take full control and defence - for the people of course. but they wont tell the military or the world what it is - moral arguments would arise. they are planning to create the prototype of the perfect soldier. most fighters these days are at a disadvantge from emotions, and basic human limitations. the company wants to make a person who is like a super human. a taller, stronger, emotionless, quick eyed, x-ray vision killing machine, and then clone him for an army so perfect it goes beyond the boundaries of our feeble human powers.
so to do this the company spends 3 years linking with some of the best drugs and medicine organizations of the world, where they secretly bargain and illegally bid for donated and stolen blood, tissues, donated organs, taking bodies and prisoners for organs and tissues and hiring some of the most profound biological researchers and surgeons of the planet. by changing and coding the human genome so many times to make the bodies much more powerful, thicker, leaner faster and thus physically advantaged the scientists get to work on altering the dna sequence. the reason for collecting parts of the human body was (a) so that it wasnt all done on one innocent being and (b) so that they can select the healthiest organs and select the ones capable of taking on the new genes to mutate with.
over time they perfect this new soldier after many mistakes and frustration. they even go as deep as making it free from such feelings as fear, sorrow and guilt for other enemies and is purely made to fight, like a machine. they make a clone of the newly put together body, so the dna has a chance to mutate and grow. they demonstrate the clone to the military and apart from a few questions and possible arguments, it all looks amazing.
at the same time, another department of the company has been openly (with the military) working on a new weapon - without knowing of the biological departments new breakthroiugh. this invention is a suit, which when worn is able to freeze, slow down and reverse or accelerate time to outwit enemies and act as a military advantage. the theory would be explained in the book - its believable.
the story soon sees these many soldiers becoming independant as u may have guessed. the mutation was not able to be so arrogantly controlled and they have grown and are growing into hideous, insane beasts with pain and a craving to just kill and get out. many escape into the local area and infections cause chaos. the military struggle while using this amazing suit and the protection of the building's HQ to try and contain these monsters and stop the company from being acknowledged by the public.
what do you think? any advice on writing with action scenes? advice please?
i can make the base a very interesting one and towards the middle the biological workers are working hard with tests and brutal knowledge to fix this virus and mutation that is spreading around the town. it may even be about one man who is a prototype but still kept his memories and wants to find out what happened to him. that would make a sad story.
in the present day a large government/military funded company has been working for our US/UK military and army for research, development and help. they design, manufacture and test new gadgets, vehicles, weapons and most military meetings and plans are held here in a tall city skyscraper.
the company has just asked to be funded for a project they know will let the army be more advanced and at a bigger advantage than any other force in the world - fit to take full control and defence - for the people of course. but they wont tell the military or the world what it is - moral arguments would arise. they are planning to create the prototype of the perfect soldier. most fighters these days are at a disadvantge from emotions, and basic human limitations. the company wants to make a person who is like a super human. a taller, stronger, emotionless, quick eyed, x-ray vision killing machine, and then clone him for an army so perfect it goes beyond the boundaries of our feeble human powers.
so to do this the company spends 3 years linking with some of the best drugs and medicine organizations of the world, where they secretly bargain and illegally bid for donated and stolen blood, tissues, donated organs, taking bodies and prisoners for organs and tissues and hiring some of the most profound biological researchers and surgeons of the planet. by changing and coding the human genome so many times to make the bodies much more powerful, thicker, leaner faster and thus physically advantaged the scientists get to work on altering the dna sequence. the reason for collecting parts of the human body was (a) so that it wasnt all done on one innocent being and (b) so that they can select the healthiest organs and select the ones capable of taking on the new genes to mutate with.
over time they perfect this new soldier after many mistakes and frustration. they even go as deep as making it free from such feelings as fear, sorrow and guilt for other enemies and is purely made to fight, like a machine. they make a clone of the newly put together body, so the dna has a chance to mutate and grow. they demonstrate the clone to the military and apart from a few questions and possible arguments, it all looks amazing.
at the same time, another department of the company has been openly (with the military) working on a new weapon - without knowing of the biological departments new breakthroiugh. this invention is a suit, which when worn is able to freeze, slow down and reverse or accelerate time to outwit enemies and act as a military advantage. the theory would be explained in the book - its believable.
the story soon sees these many soldiers becoming independant as u may have guessed. the mutation was not able to be so arrogantly controlled and they have grown and are growing into hideous, insane beasts with pain and a craving to just kill and get out. many escape into the local area and infections cause chaos. the military struggle while using this amazing suit and the protection of the building's HQ to try and contain these monsters and stop the company from being acknowledged by the public.
what do you think? any advice on writing with action scenes? advice please?
i can make the base a very interesting one and towards the middle the biological workers are working hard with tests and brutal knowledge to fix this virus and mutation that is spreading around the town. it may even be about one man who is a prototype but still kept his memories and wants to find out what happened to him. that would make a sad story.