I don't know how to make my character nervous while she talks any ideas? do I make...

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...her quiver? (jean is on a plane and she is talking to a flight attendant)

A flight attendant stared at her with a confused look upon her face, “Mam, you look a little sick.”
Jean opened her eyes one at a time, “thank you, I’m fine now I was just scared.”
“That’s good, if you need anything just press the little button on your chair,” said the flight attendant.
“Thanks, I was scared of the landing I’m just a little nervous. Thank you.”
The flight attendant nodded her head, “here’s bottled water.”
(rewrite this and win) or give me tips
 
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