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...mine. im desperate help!? Jean wanted to forget all her troubles. She had been stressed out trying to get attention from the men she fell in love with. Jean lay back on the bed, she hugged one of the fluffed pillows and fixed her eyes to the ceiling. She felt pressured, she remembered she had to visit grandfather’s grave in Manila. There were many things she had to do before she left, she’d have to choose between B and Johnny and tell Catherine her interest in Johnny. She bite her bottom lip as she realized her time in Catherine’s sleepy dreamy town was limited she’d have to leave in a few days.

(rewrite this and u win)
 
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