Im commpplete Writers Bloock. Help forr my Clique-y story.?

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ImSoStupidScenex]

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Melissa Bevington over-examined herself in the dressing room, full length mirror. The Victoria Secret, pink polka dot, Beach stripe triangle top & String bottom fitted her and her personality perfectly.

Thats the first sentences of my story. The plot is the clique goes to the beach meets a couple of guys and Melissa (alpha) and Ming Lee aka Lili (beta) falls for the same guy.

Background on girls:

Melissa Bevington:
darkish blonde hair, blue eyes, skinny and model like features, has a "im the head chick" attitude alpha of their crew

Ming Lee (Lili) Pae:
Black hair, brown eyes, dimples short aqnd skinny very pretty. Beta of their crew has a "idgaf" attitude and gets lots of guys because shes beautiful on inside and out.

Lauren Sanchez:
brown hair brown eyes, really prett y and has a great sense of style. ride or die chick and has a "i get what i want and i fite til i win" attitude

Brooke Shulski:
blonde hair green/blue eyes and loooves food down with the guys (like Dylan in The Clique or A.A in The Ashleys)

Kaylee Dawson:
Brown hair, blue eyes athletic and pretty, average height and the biggest smile.

Can you help me with what happens next, their clique name, and names for the 4 guys.
 
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SapphireR

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OK, the one comment I have is that the first sentence is a little confusing. I know in this type of story , clothes are important, but could you describe Mellisa's looks/personality instead.
For example :
Mellisa flicked her blonde hair, while examining her reflection in the full length mirror. Adding a little lip gloss, she looked at her self critically, and nodded in satisfaction. Her clothes (Describe them), fitted her slender frame perfectly.

Anyhow, you could have Mellisa going to school (now me personally, wouldn't like the character Mellisa, to me she would be the 'villain' and either the beta or the one low down in the clique would get the happily ever after), seeing her boy friend and their being a new boy at school.

Names:
Seth
Troy
Zac
Roy
 
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