Is the beginning of my story ~~good?~~ (10 pts) =]?

KristenStewart

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I start running from him, I put all of my strength into my legs and bolt my way towards the white light. My head is full of one thing and one thing only on my mind, I love you Lucas. The dark figure is catching up, my palms are sweating with fear. My heart is pounding it’s way out of my chest and I'm sure he can hear it. The dark figure pulls at my arm trying to knock me down. It must have worked because the last thing I remembered there was a thin lady standing over me with a bottle of some sort of drink.

I wake with a start, my breathing coming out in heavy gasps. I wipe the sweat from my forehead and rub my eyes trying to get used to the bright light coming through my window. “Who’s Lucas?” I whisper to myself, I have been having this same dream ever since I woke up in the hospital. I push myself into a sitting position on my bed and look at my alarm clock. It’s 5:30am. My body collapses onto my back and I groan. It’s that early and I’m not even tired? I sigh and put my feet onto the wooden floor and realize that my textbooks were next to me on the bed, and I was wearing yesterday’s clothes. I must have fallen asleep studying.

I stumble my way to the bathroom and look in the mirror. Ugh. I’m a mess. My hair is sticking in all directions and I have drooling marks on my chin. I grab my face cream from the draw and put it on. Gross, I have morning breath. I brush my teeth and then make my way downstairs. My footsteps didn’t seem to wake Mum, Dad or Melony.. Of course it wouldn’t wake Melony, she could sleep through an earthquake. I love her very dearly, but for a 12 year old girl, she’s a bit whiny, but as for mum and dad, they’re my best friends. The ones I can talk to anything about. I unlock the door and step into the cool breeze. I see this boy walking past me, he smiles at me and I smile back, he was probably wondering why I was up so early. But something about that boy seemed very familiar in some way I cannot even begin to explain.

I walk over to the porch swing and sit down. I watch as people are doing their morning jogs, or collecting their mail. And I see that same boy again, and he was so handsome! he looked like an Angel sent down from my own personal heaven. He smiles at me once again and walks inside his house with one last glance at me, like we were life long friends and we hadn't seen each other for years. Hmmm, he must be my new neighbour. Before I knew it, the time has passed and it was 7:00 and time for me to get ready, I get up from the swing, take one more look at the beautiful sun and walk inside and into my room.

Once im in my room I walk over to my wardrobe. My wardrobe is packed with clothes that I don't even wear, I sigh and find something I've never actully seen before, I've never actully seen clothing like this before, and on the back it says made in 4000. What? It's only 2010 now! I look at the dress, It looks like a top and skirt but its actully a one piece, the top half is black, with a strange bow on the front and a beautiful, white necklace attatched to it, and the bottom half is a beautiful blue colour and it's quite short. I put it on and find that it's a perfect fit, I really hadn't seen this before! My mind is so confused right now. I find some white flats that match, and add some jewellery. My hair is too annoying right now for it to be down since it's very long so i put it in a perfect -okay, not perfect but you get the idea- plait. I grab my school bag and head downstairs to get some breakfast.

"Hey Ally," Melony says, biting a piece of toast as I walk into the kitchen. "Hey Mels, where's mum and dad?" I ask, they're usually up by now making me eggs. "Sleeping, they were up really late last night. Mum said they had to do some dumb report," she explains. I wish they didn't have the same job, that way Mum could be making me breakfast. "Oh, are you gonna be okay getting to school?" I ask, hoping I don't have to take her. "Yeah, I'm catching the bus," she tells me. "Kay, well I'm going now, cya!" I say, grabbing a piece of her toast and hearing her say "Hey!" on my way out

I walk out to the garage and get into my car. I go through my bag and find what I want, my gum. On my way to school I have this really weird feeling, I don't know what it is but I'm starting to shake. Maybe I'm coming down with something. The parking lot was pretty full so I had to circle around for awhile. Once I'd found a park I had to run to class since I was running Late. I made it just in time and took my usual seat beside Jessica. "I'm going to ask him to the dance!" I heard Jazmine squeal. "Well I'm asking him to Prom!" Claire said. "I call dibs every other time!" Ashley declared. "Who is everyone talking about?" I whisper to Jessica as Mr.Varner my history teachers walks in. &quo
 
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