Is this a good idea ?

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Thousands of years ago, the darkest souls in the after life were seeked out by the devil himself and were given a never ending second chance, a chance at imortality. But they had to promise two things in return; they must never enter a santury of God and they must always do as he says, if they do they will have to face his wrath.

Many of these dark souls did break one of these rules over the centurys, and as a result only a few of the still dwelled on earth.

One of them is my main character; Ivana, she is somewhat of Satan's favorites simply because she was the one that hated God the most. She had grown strong over the centuries and became as imortal as you could get and most of all, she was Satans lover

But when she meets an angel in an alleyway her heart melts and all she wants to do is stay with him forever, but the gates of heaven will forever be closed to her, just as the gates of hell will be to him.

Ivana soon discovers a loophole in Satan's second chance scheme. She has the right to exchange her soul for anothers or fight for her own. She argees to fight her old lover for her soul.

She fails in her fight against lucifer but god takes pity on the girl who was willing to fight the hells for her love and instead of letting her go to hell, he gives her the third chance that she needed claiming 'third times the charm'
 
The idea is intriguing, but there are some holes in your idea. Flesh out your idea more, and work on your spelling and punctuation more. (For example: it should be "Satan's lover" and it should be "immortal" and "centuries".) And always remember, God is always capitalized; it's just a sign of respect. Despite this, however, I'd read this story if you can fix what's wrong with it.
 
The idea is intriguing, but there are some holes in your idea. Flesh out your idea more, and work on your spelling and punctuation more. (For example: it should be "Satan's lover" and it should be "immortal" and "centuries".) And always remember, God is always capitalized; it's just a sign of respect. Despite this, however, I'd read this story if you can fix what's wrong with it.
 
Needs more development. Given the fictional nature of this story, you can expand beyond what is conventionally known about god and satan. It needs more history and an interesting plot.
 
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