... I don't know if it's off to a bad start or I just have too high of expectation. Here are two excerpts; the first is literally the very beginning; the next is about seven chapters later.
Resistan sat on an island in the middle of the river and listened to the burble of water rush by in the river as his hand held a fishing reel. The sun danced playfully on the ripples and ducks splashed in the shallows. The air was dry but not too hot, a breeze wafted over the river, and a tree on the island provided just enough shade.
“Where am I” she thought, “who is that human? What happened?” She stood and stumble a step or two and fell. A pounding headache ravaged her head. She cradled her head until the pounding stopped. When it had receded, thirst overcame her. She crept quietly to a satchel that lay with some other equipment. A leather bladder was amongst the kit and she pore the whole bottle into her mouth. Then she searched for some food. She found some flat bread in sheepskin and ate. Then she felt the hand.
P.S. What do you think of the names?
oops sorry for the typo... I just finished that paragraph and it's late. sorry =)
Resistan sat on an island in the middle of the river and listened to the burble of water rush by in the river as his hand held a fishing reel. The sun danced playfully on the ripples and ducks splashed in the shallows. The air was dry but not too hot, a breeze wafted over the river, and a tree on the island provided just enough shade.
“Where am I” she thought, “who is that human? What happened?” She stood and stumble a step or two and fell. A pounding headache ravaged her head. She cradled her head until the pounding stopped. When it had receded, thirst overcame her. She crept quietly to a satchel that lay with some other equipment. A leather bladder was amongst the kit and she pore the whole bottle into her mouth. Then she searched for some food. She found some flat bread in sheepskin and ate. Then she felt the hand.
P.S. What do you think of the names?
oops sorry for the typo... I just finished that paragraph and it's late. sorry =)