So this is a small rap i made can ya tell me what should be fixed?

Grim

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Even I can see it needs fixing but I'm not sure n always overly tired on how to think so str8.

Im cuttin in deep watching you tuck n sleep,
Fuckin lack n creep as your blood seeps through the crevices, the sheets are sliced
Its silent cant even ice it, im violent dont even wanna isolate it, give me a violin n im gunna impale it right to ya skull, you looked innocent at first but im gunna give you a late birthday date, i indicate you are still the same n this is your day for your fate.
 
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