this is my second poem, give opinions, comments?

Yujinchan

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Part of Me

I walk along the beach,
I heard a beautiful sound of the waves,
I witness the beautiful nature,
I touch the soft sand.

It would be great if I can be a part of nature,
It would be nice if my house is by the beach,
It would be good if I can share this feeling with others.

If I got a chance to share my feelings with others,
I would choose you.

im a bit blur that time but, please give your comments. my dream is to hev my own songs and poems. now, this is my first step. so, please help me with my dream.
 
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