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Firstly, I use English UK spellings {realise, spelt, favourite}, so don't "correct" me on them.
It's a quick first draft, it's probably not written particularly well, feel free to criticise me, but don't be rude.
Here it is;
“Once upon a time,” she’d say, speaking in a gentle voice as she tucked me into bed, “there was a princess named Estella, whose parents kept her restrained—”
“What’s that mean?” I lisped.
“It’s like being in a prison,” mum replied, then continued, “Estella’s parents hid her in the highest tower of their castle; they didn’t want her to fall in love, so they kept her there. She was only ever allowed out when there was no one else around, and someone had to be with her. Estella was tired of being controlled so much, she wanted to be free like all the other — uh — princesses of the land.
“So, one day, Estella waited until her parents were in sleeping, opened her window, and escaped. She visited the village for the very first time in her life, and met a handsome young man named Nicholas.”
“What did Nicholas look like, Mumma?”
“Nicholas,” she sighed, smiling, “Mm… Nicholas had soft brown hair, down to his shoulders — that’s how men used to have their hair — beautiful blue eyes that were the colour of the ocean, and a smile that warmed your heart. Nicholas and Estella started taking walks together, until Estella’s parents found out. And then… and then Grace fell asleep as Seren was telling her a story.”
Thoughts, comments, criticisms?
Also, judging from this, do you have any idea about the plot?
Thanks! =)
It's a quick first draft, it's probably not written particularly well, feel free to criticise me, but don't be rude.
Here it is;
“Once upon a time,” she’d say, speaking in a gentle voice as she tucked me into bed, “there was a princess named Estella, whose parents kept her restrained—”
“What’s that mean?” I lisped.
“It’s like being in a prison,” mum replied, then continued, “Estella’s parents hid her in the highest tower of their castle; they didn’t want her to fall in love, so they kept her there. She was only ever allowed out when there was no one else around, and someone had to be with her. Estella was tired of being controlled so much, she wanted to be free like all the other — uh — princesses of the land.
“So, one day, Estella waited until her parents were in sleeping, opened her window, and escaped. She visited the village for the very first time in her life, and met a handsome young man named Nicholas.”
“What did Nicholas look like, Mumma?”
“Nicholas,” she sighed, smiling, “Mm… Nicholas had soft brown hair, down to his shoulders — that’s how men used to have their hair — beautiful blue eyes that were the colour of the ocean, and a smile that warmed your heart. Nicholas and Estella started taking walks together, until Estella’s parents found out. And then… and then Grace fell asleep as Seren was telling her a story.”
Thoughts, comments, criticisms?
Also, judging from this, do you have any idea about the plot?
Thanks! =)