Personally no, I would not. I hated the phrasing you used, and the guitar quality was terrible. Your voice is lacking some drive in this recording. It isn't properly recorded for me to be able to give a real opinion as you can blame the terrible recording quality for your voice, guitar etc... but if it was properly recorded I still wouldn't like it. Not a song I could ever imagine listening to, it doesn't have anything going for it for my taste.
Sorry, but I'm being honest