introduce me to love (poem advice)?

[DavidS]

An Introduction

I am not known for chocolate,
Silly songs, or pretty flowers,
Venus oft times keeps me from
All her alluring powers
So just take my hand firmly,
Don’t let me talk my way out of
The things you wish to do with me
Introduce me to love

I’ve been told I’m only
But a cold stone in the grass
Yet other times mistaken
As a danger to the mass
So forgive me if I’m nervous,
Seduce me with a shove
Forgive me for being curious
Introduce me to love.

David Stuart

ideas? comments? improvements? critiques? thanks

 

[theotherrenee]

I thought that "Introduce me to love" was a really good title or topic or w/e, but when I read it I was a little disappointed.
I like the last few lines the best ("So forgive me if I’m nervous, Seduce me with a shove Forgive me for being curious Introduce me to love")
But I thought you could have done a lot more with the rest of it. I didn't feel like the rest of it had much meaning.

 

[michelle]

It's really good! Quite original, usually people write about heartbreaks and falling in love. The poem flowed well. It's good as it is.