I don't think I'm very good at writing but you know... I'm trying to improve.
Here it is:
His hand came swinging, slapping me full force on the cheek leaving behind a stinging sensation, and suddenly something snapped inside me. It wasn’t my heart, for that was as tough as steel now, but I knew I couldn’t tolerate this treatment any longer. “You’re a failure, Mackenzie Braxton! A failure!” he shouted. He was referring to my low mark on my history essay. Nothing unusual here though, what he was doing was illegal, but it was a regular occurrence. Abuse. Both physical and verbal abuse, but it happened weekly, and had been happening for seven years, ever since the death of my father when I was eight. Now at fifteen, my stepfather shows no signs of stopping. When my mother married this cruel excuse of a man, the pain never ceased.
So.... I'd like to here both good & bad opinions please. :] & If you have any tips so I could improve that would be awesome!
Here it is:
His hand came swinging, slapping me full force on the cheek leaving behind a stinging sensation, and suddenly something snapped inside me. It wasn’t my heart, for that was as tough as steel now, but I knew I couldn’t tolerate this treatment any longer. “You’re a failure, Mackenzie Braxton! A failure!” he shouted. He was referring to my low mark on my history essay. Nothing unusual here though, what he was doing was illegal, but it was a regular occurrence. Abuse. Both physical and verbal abuse, but it happened weekly, and had been happening for seven years, ever since the death of my father when I was eight. Now at fifteen, my stepfather shows no signs of stopping. When my mother married this cruel excuse of a man, the pain never ceased.
So.... I'd like to here both good & bad opinions please. :] & If you have any tips so I could improve that would be awesome!