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May 31 Mon 2010
Fate

Oh cruel fate how do I fight thy
Once happiness comes to me
It never seems to last
So many tears I shed at night
So many times I can hear my heart
Breaking apart
Demonic blood is coursing through my veins
And my eyes blinded by dark shadows
Feeling my heart racing
Feeling my strength draining away from me
And I’m afraid that the hurt is here to stay
Been alone most of my life
No one to understand this pain in my heart
I feel so isolated like my life has been drained from me
I have nothing to look forward too
They say everything will be ok
But once again I’m slowly beginning to lose my faith
My heart and soul are bleeding
And I see no escape
Demonic voices chasing me in my dreams
There is no way to break free
No one to come and save me
I’m all alone to save myself
From my soon to be destiny
My soul is crying and screaming
To be free
Every beat my heart takes
I die just a little bit
My mind is on the brink of insanity
And nothing makes sense anymore
My lips breathe your name once more
Before I surrender myself to darkness
Now and forevermore.