I know the grammar and the spelling is SHOCKING! I don't want to get this published im just testing my imagination. Would you continue to read it? I'm working on my grammar skills. Thinking about taking a writing class which is much needed. Be open with your opinion, don't be nice 
Could you also tell me if it is similar to any other book you have read?
"When you are bitten by a vampire your lungs, blood stream and heart are instantly filled with a kind of burning acid. You will scream in pain as you feel your heart stop, your lungs shrink, your constantly trying to breath as you gasp and choke on your own blood and saliva."
"Your skin begins to rot as if you had been dead for three months. Your teeth fall out and your eyes bleed. The only way out is to let the vampire drain you for all your blood until you are dead."
I smiled weakly then let my eyes droop. At least 10 seconds of silence before i began again.
"If you don't let the vampire finish and your left there to rot; well thats an adventure you don't want to take."
"Why are you telling me this?" Cindy Clawman asked as she gripped on to my arms. Her short black hair stuck to the sweat on her forehead. Her pleading eyes so large and full of false hope.
"you said you want to be me, to see the world as i see it, and to have a taste for things that no human can ever imagine."
"you want to be a vampire?" I finished with a chuckle, but it was meaningless and full of sympathy. Cindy noded her head in agreement. She was doubtful but she knew all too well that it was per sway me into turning her or it would be death. I would not be letting her go free, not as a human any way.
A loud laugh irrupted from my orange lips. As much as i desperately wanted a companion, it was too much of a inconvenience. No new born likes what they see in the mirror. No one likes what they must do to survive until they become a vampire. She would be constently relying on me, attaching her self to my veins, falling in love like i was to become a mother to a needy five year old child.
I really liked Cindy. She was not simple minded like most mortals. She was amusing, she brought me more entertainment then any other victim, as if she tried her best to make me laugh hoping to become my friend. Hoping to be spared.
If i was going to turn any body into a vampire; Cindy would be the one. This was why i hadn't feasted on her yet. The smell was tempting but im strong and iv had to face temptation before. Human and non human, it was all the same. You want something so bad tho, your mind knows you shouldn't take it.
I have been dwelling on this for almost two weeks. Letting Cindy feed of the blood off other victims, letting her get the taste of something that takes many years to get used to.
If she hadn't told me her intentions of becoming a vampire i would probably have killed her by now.
"It sounds fun at first, but.." as i though back on my life in the first few years of being immortal, the highs and lows and then as the centuries passing, knowing your whole life; family and friends are gone. Every one you know is berried and you are completely alone. without finishing my sentence i grabbed Cindy's head and leaned forward, fangs slowly sinking into her thought. When i realised i had purposly missed her blood vein i knew what i was doing. I knew while thinking of all the loneliness pain and agony i have been through i did what any spoiled angry thing would do. I took my anger out on someone else. I was going to make Cindy a vampire. i was going to destroy her life as mine was.
As my four blood stained fangs dug into Cindy's neck i watched with my eyes the thick blood gushing down my face. I wanted to drink so much. Cindy's relaxed body soon started to shake, then squirm. A load scream echoed the bedroom of my two story house. I almost felt guilty, i got ready to end her pain but it was only a couple of minutes before she would feel better. For her the minutes will seem hours and i knew by the way she was screaming she had changed her mind. She wanted me to kill her and kill her fast.
Cindy relaxed. Her breathing stopped and her blood froze. I took my fangs out of her neck. A waist of dark red liquid layed puddled on my wooden floor, so i bent down and started licking it up like an animal. I wanted more but her blood was no good to me now. It was tainted with the acid from my mouth.
Many of the people i take back to my house plead with me to become a vampire. While they are chained up in my bedroom, scars on there body from my bites. They don't want to die. I don;t want them to die; but if i let them go after taking some blood the vampire academic will begin. I would be killed and for this and I'm not ready to die yet. If i was then i would be dead by now.
Cindy sat on the floor sleeping. Her head rested on her shoulder.
Sorry, there are a lot of typo's in there, such as throught supposed to be throat. You will find the rest
Could you also tell me if it is similar to any other book you have read?
"When you are bitten by a vampire your lungs, blood stream and heart are instantly filled with a kind of burning acid. You will scream in pain as you feel your heart stop, your lungs shrink, your constantly trying to breath as you gasp and choke on your own blood and saliva."
"Your skin begins to rot as if you had been dead for three months. Your teeth fall out and your eyes bleed. The only way out is to let the vampire drain you for all your blood until you are dead."
I smiled weakly then let my eyes droop. At least 10 seconds of silence before i began again.
"If you don't let the vampire finish and your left there to rot; well thats an adventure you don't want to take."
"Why are you telling me this?" Cindy Clawman asked as she gripped on to my arms. Her short black hair stuck to the sweat on her forehead. Her pleading eyes so large and full of false hope.
"you said you want to be me, to see the world as i see it, and to have a taste for things that no human can ever imagine."
"you want to be a vampire?" I finished with a chuckle, but it was meaningless and full of sympathy. Cindy noded her head in agreement. She was doubtful but she knew all too well that it was per sway me into turning her or it would be death. I would not be letting her go free, not as a human any way.
A loud laugh irrupted from my orange lips. As much as i desperately wanted a companion, it was too much of a inconvenience. No new born likes what they see in the mirror. No one likes what they must do to survive until they become a vampire. She would be constently relying on me, attaching her self to my veins, falling in love like i was to become a mother to a needy five year old child.
I really liked Cindy. She was not simple minded like most mortals. She was amusing, she brought me more entertainment then any other victim, as if she tried her best to make me laugh hoping to become my friend. Hoping to be spared.
If i was going to turn any body into a vampire; Cindy would be the one. This was why i hadn't feasted on her yet. The smell was tempting but im strong and iv had to face temptation before. Human and non human, it was all the same. You want something so bad tho, your mind knows you shouldn't take it.
I have been dwelling on this for almost two weeks. Letting Cindy feed of the blood off other victims, letting her get the taste of something that takes many years to get used to.
If she hadn't told me her intentions of becoming a vampire i would probably have killed her by now.
"It sounds fun at first, but.." as i though back on my life in the first few years of being immortal, the highs and lows and then as the centuries passing, knowing your whole life; family and friends are gone. Every one you know is berried and you are completely alone. without finishing my sentence i grabbed Cindy's head and leaned forward, fangs slowly sinking into her thought. When i realised i had purposly missed her blood vein i knew what i was doing. I knew while thinking of all the loneliness pain and agony i have been through i did what any spoiled angry thing would do. I took my anger out on someone else. I was going to make Cindy a vampire. i was going to destroy her life as mine was.
As my four blood stained fangs dug into Cindy's neck i watched with my eyes the thick blood gushing down my face. I wanted to drink so much. Cindy's relaxed body soon started to shake, then squirm. A load scream echoed the bedroom of my two story house. I almost felt guilty, i got ready to end her pain but it was only a couple of minutes before she would feel better. For her the minutes will seem hours and i knew by the way she was screaming she had changed her mind. She wanted me to kill her and kill her fast.
Cindy relaxed. Her breathing stopped and her blood froze. I took my fangs out of her neck. A waist of dark red liquid layed puddled on my wooden floor, so i bent down and started licking it up like an animal. I wanted more but her blood was no good to me now. It was tainted with the acid from my mouth.
Many of the people i take back to my house plead with me to become a vampire. While they are chained up in my bedroom, scars on there body from my bites. They don't want to die. I don;t want them to die; but if i let them go after taking some blood the vampire academic will begin. I would be killed and for this and I'm not ready to die yet. If i was then i would be dead by now.
Cindy sat on the floor sleeping. Her head rested on her shoulder.
Sorry, there are a lot of typo's in there, such as throught supposed to be throat. You will find the rest