A good creative introduction for my story line?

paige

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First of all I will tell you about what I want my story to be...
Well the first chapter, like the introduction is going to be like this guy named Gustus and he is 7 years old, and lives at an orphanage and he really likes this girl named Mia, but just like "kid" love, so something creative about there cute little kiddie love would be good, if you can come up with something.
Second chapter- Is Mia gets adopted and like can you describe how she leaves, having trouble with a cute little way to have her leave. But the guy she is getting adopted to is secretly a pimp, and when he comes he just like comes out of his car and jsut like i'll take this one and grabs her by the end of her tee shirt, so something along those lines
Third chapter- 15 years later, Gustus was old enough to leave the orphanage and he's at a batchular party with his friends and then like a guy shouts out the girls are here, and a bunch of prostidudes walk in and right away he reconizes it is Mia, and all the guys are like trying to pay her and stuf, then Gustus grabs her by her arm to pull her away and notices she is stoned and she says something like "dont touch me, unless you have cash" he says heres 500 dollars and so she goes with him and they talk she finds out its him and she says likee no, don't love me i'm bad. you deserve much more. He says No, party ends she goes back to the streets. He says i love you, i will get you back.
Chapter 4- He goes to the pimps house and like says "im taking Mia, i love her, im going to marrier her" And the pimp goes "Marrier her? in a joking way. And says "Shes my property, so dont touch" Gustus says something and the pimp punches him gustus falls to the ground, Mia walks in and says Gustus leave, go dont love me! Then he gustus struggles to get up and says i love you, pimp hits Mia, she falls to the ground with blood on her mouth and then he kicks her in the stomach, and says "Thats what i do with my property". Gustus gets up and pulls out a gun and says "not anymore" and shoots him, he falls dead.
Chapter 5- Mia runs away with Gustus and they date.
Epolugue- 2 years later- Gustus proposes and she excepts... and they adopt a child from the same orphanage they went to, and her name is Miley.
 
First, it sounds a little "Pretty Woman"ish. Second, you need more content than 5 chapters. You may want to include a period where, instead of Gustus immediately telling her he loves her, he and Mia spend time getting to know each other again. It doesn't make sense that someone who hasn't seen another person for 15 years would in one night tell the other person they love them. Plus this will just give you an opportunity to expand on the story. It may help to make Mia a bit more likable and having a desire for love but being the "wounded bird" type of girl.
As for your opening, you could go with something like some of the other boys at the orphanage were picking on poor little Mia who is new at that orphanage for some small idiosyncrasy and Gustus sticks up for her. Obviously Mia makes her first friend at her new orphanage.
 
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